Class 19: WED MAR 27

Wake Up

The Braille Riddle

Promises and Prizes

Canary in Hand

The Skincare Lecture/Demo

A SMALL EXERCISE ASSIGNMENT:

  • Read The Skincare Definition Argument by a former student schoolcookiemonster.
  • Consider its strengths, but read critically, being alert to anything you find confusing or unpersuasive.
  • For examples of feedback already provided on the argument, consult The Skincare Definition Workshop.
  • On the Argument page, leave a Reply offering praise and criticism. Don’t forget the criticism. Writers don’t get better without honest appraisals from their readers.

Metaphor

Why I don’t assign
“Group Writing” tasks:

Housekeeping

  1. Thank you for your Visual Rewrite posts. We have collected 15 so far.
  2. If you received a zero early this morning, it means I didn’t find your Visual Rewrite. It may exist but not be correctly categorized. If that’s so, open it in Edit and add it to the Visual Rewrite category.
  3. If you did post your Causal Draft and did not receive a zero in Canvas this morning, post your Causal Rewrite now.
  4. Grades are ALWAYS PROVISIONAL. Please don’t accept your first grade. Revise for improvement and request a Regrade. Even zeroes can be eliminated by publishing your posts.
  5. Ask for Feedback on your own post, or read feedback I’ve provided to other students, for advice on how to improve your work.
  6. Remember, you need AT LEAST TWO posts that show considerable responsiveness to Feedback for your Portfolio.
  7. Your Visual Rewrite could be one of them.

32 Responses to Class 19: WED MAR 27

  1. ravensfan8's avatar ravensfan8 says:
    March 27, 2024 at 9:13 am

    -Braille is a way to communicate with people that do not have the certain things that other people have. It is a way to understand language and understand something or one another. “Why is there Braille at the drive through window” is the riddle. 

    -The only thing that matters is keeping your readers on the hook. You want your reader to read the last and final 1000th word. Your header helps reel the reader in but now it is up to you to make sure that the reader stays and gains something from your writing. Make sure to deliver something of value in the being of your writing so that the reader will stay. You kind of have to offer a whole in the beginning of your writing because if you offer a little piece of cheese the reader will most likely leave. Offering a whole cake helps the reader stay. Make sure when writing each sentence you are promising the reader that something important is coming and then immediately deliver with the important evidence. Readers will lose patience if not so.

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  2. hockeyfan's avatar hockeyfan says:
    March 27, 2024 at 9:13 am

    Writing is a recursive process.

    Brail riddle: a way of commuting with people who don’t have access to the things we do. “Why is there braille at the drive through window?”

    The headline is a good way to hook the reader, convincing them to continue reading is what is difficult. Promises and prizes are the heart of a good essay. You cannot expect readers to wait for the vague display you give at the beginning, they want information to form an opinion.

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  3. Brandon Sigall's avatar eaglesfan says:
    March 27, 2024 at 9:13 am

    -The Braille Riddle: Braille is used as a tactile alphabet and for other people who need it to gain meaning and understand what is trying to be said or told to them. Braille used to have huge letters used to communicate to the people. The problem with it was the letters were so huge they would take up a lot of space. The riddle says Why is there braille at the drive-thru window? In thought it is a good idea so people can understand what they want to get on the menu. The problem is it defeats the purpose of a drive-thru because now the person must get out of their car just to be able to determine what they want. This would then mean it is not fast food as the driver behind must wait longer then they probably want to.

    -Promises and prizes: Promises and prizes are the heart of communication in writing. Finding the benefit in the writing is very important. The readers should stay on the hook by using promises and prizes. The goal in a 1,000 word paper is to get a person to read the thousandth word. A paragraph that gives no promises and no prizes will make a reader stop reading and quit bothering with the paper. The paper should entice the viewer to keep reading and not be boring to a reader. The person who writes the paper should reward the reader with a prize since they stuck around for a few sentences. The reader should get something they want for reading through the paper every few sentences.

    -Housekeeping: Post causal rewrite now. Always revise, the first grade should not be acceptable. Changes should be made to make the work better. Ask for feedback to get advice on how to improve work. At least two posts should show significant revision as that is the requirement for the final portfolio. The visual rewrite can be one of them.

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    • davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:
      March 27, 2024 at 11:24 am

      Ummm . . . The problem with braille at the drive-thru window is that, in order to benefit from it, the reader (who is also the driver of the car) would have to be blind. So . . . .

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  4. temporal111's avatar temporal111 says:
    March 27, 2024 at 9:13 am

    braille riddle: why is there braille at the drive through window?

    keep your readers on the hook

    make a promise in your writing, and then deliver a prize

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  5. username1132005's avatar username1132005 says:
    March 27, 2024 at 9:13 am

    -Our portfolio will not be complete if we do not have revisions on two papers

    -The brail riddle is demonstrating communication methods of how we can connect with people

    -The riddle reads, “why is there braille at the drive-thru window”

    -What matters at the fundamental level, is that you have to keep your readers engaged, and to make sure they read that last one word. Job one is getting the reader to read it, and the second job is keeping the reader engaged and reading your work. Give the promise, get the prize with your writing. Make an offer, then deliver it in your writing. The promise would be making sure your readers know something is coming, you cannot expect them to just wait. If they know something is coming they would hopefully be more likely to read your paper. 

     

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  6. thatpersonoverthere's avatar thatpersonoverthere says:
    March 27, 2024 at 9:14 am

    The braille riddle relates to the visual rhetoric assignment. Because it examines other ways we talk to people and how other’s communicate. 

    Find a way to make your essay seem like it cares about the people affected by it. It makes a better story to follow which encourages the reader to become invested and thus read more of your essay. It makes it easier to follow because it gives them something to pay attention to in case the subject matter is something that they aren’t interested in reading due to the niche content. Give the reader a promise, then award a small prize quickly. It’s hard to make people care about something simply because the author cares about it. People need reasons to invest time and energy into something and those reasons differ for every person simply because their human. I don’t think it’s due to greed, or even indifference or connected to any real feeling at all. It’s just the way some brains are wired. 

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    • davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:
      March 27, 2024 at 11:17 am

      That’s a brilliant explanation of why we need to engage readers, TPOT. FACTS are so secondary. We can’t do without them, but nobody we haven’t already compelled to read our work will ever see them.

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  7. ilovemydog's avatar ilovemydog says:
    March 27, 2024 at 9:15 am
    • The Braille riddle said “Why is there Braille a the drive-through window?’”
    • When writing finding the human benefit of our work is important. The only other thing that matters at the fundamental value is keeping our readers on the hook. 
    • We want to make sure our reader makes it to word 1000. It is difficult to keep your readers interested, but if we do we may have convinced them of something. 
    • Making promises while writing and then giving prizes to the reader is a way to keep people interested. It makes them want to keep reading. 
    • Readers need the cheese. 
    • As said earlier in the course, it is good to revise and rewrite whatever we submit. First drafts are important, but can always be improved. 
    • We need posts for our portfolio that show that we made a considerable amount of responsiveness to the feedback we received. 

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  8. SleepyCat's avatar SleepyCat says:
    March 27, 2024 at 9:15 am
    • It seems counterintuitive to have braille at the drive-thru window as it makes no sense that a blind person would be in the situation of sitting in the driver’s seat of a car and needing braille. Much of class was dedicated to conversing over braille and its creation; that someone has comprised an entire alphabet into six dots that can be easily understood by people with blindness.
    • To keep a reader happy and interested in what we have to say, we offer promises and prizes. Vague and unconcise wording may turn a reader away, but if we include a promise with evidence to back it up, than interest will be peaked.

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  9. Naturechild101's avatar Naturechild101 says:
    March 27, 2024 at 9:31 am
    • Our portfolio is really important to our grades, we should be putting our work into the portfolio category and asking for feedback. Grades are always provisional.
    • The Braille Riddle: Braille is found everywhere, this riddle taught us a new perspective of how people who can’t see with their eyes, see with their hands. It opened us up to a different writing system and showed us how interesting and unique braille is by understanding all the different letters and numbers through six dots. 
    • Promises and prises: Beneficial advice given before about writing is to make the story about humans, make them the heart of the story and they’ll care. Once the heart of the story is identified, keep the reader on the hook. Keeping their attention is important because you want to convince them of something they’ve never thought of before.  You should reward the reader for sticking around with an interesting prize. Readers are not like loyal animals, they will abandon your work if the interest is not kept strong. 

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  10. The Gamer 2.0's avatar The Gamer 2.0 says:
    March 27, 2024 at 9:51 am
    • Start to ask for feedback in the post because it’s starting to get late and it’s important to get feedback so that you are able to improve your work.
    • There are many ways of communicating with others just like the professor had given us an example in class. We learned how the braille language is used and we went over how it is done in class. I found it very interesting because it is amazing how we learnt something that many thought was very difficult but it’s simple and unique. We solved the riddle using the braille method which I had fun figuring out and really understanding how it works.
    • In writing it’s good to have a promise and a prize reason being that it’s good to have the reader interested in what they are reading so that they are losing focus.

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  11. Snowman10's avatar Snowman10 says:
    March 27, 2024 at 10:41 am
    • Braille Purpose: It’s for people who can’t see.
    • Drive-Through Mystery: Why is there Braille there?
    • Engaging Writing: Keep readers interested by promising valuable information in every sentence.
    • Human Connection: Focus on how writing benefits people.
    • Continuous Improvement: Always revise and learn from feedback.

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    • davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:
      March 27, 2024 at 11:28 am

      Nice, Snowman, but not quite there. I do like getting to know you at last.

      While it’s crucial that we promise important information, it’s equally essential that we deliver on that promise with a prize before our readers lose interest, which happens, as you might suspect, almost immediately.

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  12. holistic25's avatar holistic25 says:
    March 27, 2024 at 12:47 pm

    Your portfolio has to have first drafts and better drafts.

    We have different ways of communicating: tactile, verbal, nonverbal. All can be very effective.

    The headline will hook your reader if you’re good at it, but keeping them is the hard part. Job 1: getting them. Job 2: Keeping them.

    Promises and prizes are essential to effective writing to keep the reader hooked.

    Make an offer and deliver.

    The reader wants to know ‘what’s my stake in this?’

    Just because you are delivering information does not mean your reader will stick with you.

    Readers are very demanding.

    As a persuasive writer, your job is to leave an unforgettable imprint on the reader’s mind. One so prevalent that they adopt a lifestyle change in that way of thinking.

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  13. ilovebeesss's avatar ilovebeesss says:
    March 27, 2024 at 11:57 pm
    • Ask for feedback: This is a rewriting course, so it is necessary to have some type of feedback so we can review and rewrite our drafts. This will help us perform better in our writing. Additionally, it is not too late to ask for medical feedback.
    • The Braille Riddle: Communicate an idea with few or no words. A way to communicate with people who don’t have access to all the methods we use to access other people’s meaning.
    • Writing Tips: Keep your readers informed. Make sure your reader reads the 1000th word. Job number one is to get them there, job number two is to keep them. We can achieve this by making a promise and giving them a reward in return.

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  14. Gymrat's avatar Gymrat says:
    March 28, 2024 at 11:13 am
    • Professor talks about being shy and how he does not like being around people, the only way he actually can confront it is with his job because he knows he has to. 
    • The professor’s job is to fix unpolished texts and make them polished, he gets people to see another perspective 
    • In the portfolio it has to have your first draft and a better draft, as in looked over and edited and changed 
    • Braille question: why is there braille at the drive-through window 
    • We want to made sure the readers read through all of the 10000 words 
    • Keep the reader engaged, first get them to read it and second keep them engaged during the reading 
    • Offer them something in return they will continue reading the writing. With something being received it makes the reader want to keep reading because they feel as if they are receiving what they have been promised

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  15. toetio's avatar toetio says:
    March 28, 2024 at 8:45 pm

    Braille Riddle 

    • Braille is a form of communication which uses the sense of touch
    • Why is there braille at the drive-through window? this is a riddle I do not know that answer to, perhaps they are instruction for someone who works there.
    • Braille is a fascinating alphabet to learn about because it was designed for people who are blind.  When learning about how it is constructed and used it allows you to step into the sea in which another group of people swim.

    Promises and prizes

    • The job of a headline is to hook the reader.
    • The job of every sentence in a text is to get the reader to read the next sentence until it is finished.
    • The promise sentence acts as a headline, and the sentence that follows it delivers on what the headline promised.

    Portfolio

    • The end of the semester is approaching, and we should start making revisions to our previous work because we cannot submit a first draft.

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    • davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:
      March 29, 2024 at 4:18 pm

      Just beautiful, Toetio.

      Braille is the sea others swim in. From now on, I’ll ask YOU what lesson my riddles illuminate. 🙂

      The Promise is the Headline. Another gem!

      5/3

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  16. Calm&Patient's avatar Calm&Patient says:
    April 8, 2024 at 6:26 pm

    Street signs are a form of proposal, they propose that you either do or don’t do something. 

    Riddle: Braille at the drive through. Honestly, I’m not sure.

    •In Class discussion: forgiveness

    Forgiveness is based on one’s personal boundaries and conditions. 

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  17. doglover7025's avatar doglover7025 says:
    April 24, 2024 at 8:10 am

    3/27– 

    Portfolio isnt complete until feedback is done

    Why is there braille at the drive thru window?- we dont know 

    Your goal in a 1000 words is to make sure your reader reads word 1000, it means you convinced them along the way 

    If you make a promise, you get a little prize… your readers arent going to hold on unless they get information theyre being teased with

    Article- the author is stating that there is changes in neighborhood, she then goes on to explain the changes… promise—prize, also like a tease—reward

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