Vancouver faces a significant problem with heroin addicts committing crimes to fuel their habits, leading to the creation of a “free heroin for addicts” program aimed at addressing this issue. However, the program faces challenges such as making addicts maintain daily activities (jobs, interactions, and relationships) due to their substance abuse which leads them to continue to engage in criminal behavior to support their addiction. Addiction drives heroin users to desperate measures to obtain the drug, leading to crimes such as breaking and theft. The program’s focus on providing heroin may reduce street crimes and hospital visits related to unsanitary drug use. While the program aims to improve the city’s safety, it does not offer a solution to the addiction crisis.
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Your draft is the best so far, ILoveBees, and well on the way to excellence.
—If addicts rob and mug and burglarize (three very robust verbs) to support their habits, do you need to call it out as a problem, or could you trust your readers to get it?
—”fuel” is nice.
—You’re using “faces” here for the second time.
—Logic of “making addicts maintain . . . due to their abuse . . . which leads” confuses this reader.
—You could say that addiction DRIVES and also LEADS, but that phrasing wastes the very robust verbs available in your sentence (they steal, they break into homes and cars, they also prostitute themselves and infect their partners).
—Here again, you shun your verbs (IMPROVE and SOLVE) in favor of the much weaker “aim” and “offer.” See?
—”While the program IMPROVES public safety, it doesn’t SOLVE the addiction crisis.
—NOW do you see?
You demonstrate strong ability here, ILB. If you’re willing to revise this draft, I’d recommend NOT LOOKING BACK AT THE ORIGINAL. Instead, consider your draft a new original, and make it the best, clearest, most direct and robust version you can.
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