Purposeful Summaries-ravensfan

First Article-Are Multivitamins Dangerous: It seems counterintuitive that multivitamins are advertised to be a healthy supplement but in reality they can be causing severe health problems like organs. Illnesses that the vitamins say they get rid of do not actually help it. Nearly a third of Americans use multivitamins daily. Vitamin Shoppe makes over $700 million dollars annual. Research has found that if you take too many vitamins they could lead to the person getting extremely sick or even cancer.

Second Article-Is this photo ethical: It seems counterintuitive that an innocent girl was still alive but then died because photographers wanted to get their perfect picture to make them big. Photographers were there after a historic earthquake. Fabienne’s death was very unexpected. Her death was not from the awful earthquake from nature but from human action. She was shot in the crossfire by police. The photo became a symbolical meaning and blew up from a disgusting act.

Third Article-Paper or Plastic: It seems counterintuitive that making paper can be a bad thing but it turns out that it might not be as harmful as it seems. The trees hold on to carbon even after they have been cut down. As long as the tree and products that make the paper are not decomposed the carbon stays trapped inside which is called a carbon sink. 16.7 million tons of carbon contained in wood products in landfills this includes paper. That means 61.1 million tons of carbon dioxide would be floating in the atmosphere but it is not.

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  1. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:

    RavensFan, I’m going to help with phrasing to make your statements clearer. A single exercise of this kind will not turn anybody into a phrasing genius overnight, but I want to provide models that will hopefully help you read your work carefully looking for confusing phrases and claims.

    It seems counterintuitive that multivitamins are advertised to be a healthy supplement but in reality they can be causing severe health problems like organs.

    —It seems counterintuitive that multivitamins are advertised to be healthy supplements when in reality they can cause severe damage to organs.

    Illnesses that the vitamins say they get rid of do not actually help it.

    —Illnesses that the vitamin makers say they get rid of are not actually cured.

    Vitamin Shoppe makes over $700 million dollars annual.

    —Vitamin Shoppe makes over $700 million dollars annually from the sale of multivitamins.

    Research has found that if you take too many vitamins they could lead to the person getting extremely sick or even cancer.

    —Research has found that taking too many vitamins can cause extreme illness, even cancer.

    It seems counterintuitive that an innocent girl was still alive but then died because photographers wanted to get their perfect picture to make them big.

    —It seems counterintuitive that an innocent girl, still alive after being shot by police, died because photographers tried to take award-winning pictures instead of helping her.

    Photographers were there after a historic earthquake. Fabienne’s death was very unexpected. Her death was not from the awful earthquake from nature but from human action.

    —Fabienne survived the awful earthquake that drew the photographers to her island but died unexpectedly in police crossfire that followed.

    The photo became a symbolical meaning and blew up from a disgusting act.

    —The photos have many symbolic meanings, some tragic, some disgusting.

    It seems counterintuitive that making paper can be a bad thing but it turns out that it might not be as harmful as it seems. The trees hold on to carbon even after they have been cut down.

    —It seems counterintuitive that making paper by cutting down trees is not be as harmful as it seems. The trees hold on to carbon even after they have been cut down.

    As long as the tree and products that make the paper are not decomposed the carbon stays trapped inside which is called a carbon sink.

    —As long as the tree and the paper products made from it are not decomposed, the carbon stays trapped inside, which is called a carbon sink.

    16.7 million tons of carbon contained in wood products in landfills this includes paper.

    —16.7 million tons of carbon contained in wood products including paper, are trapped in landfills, not in the atmosphere.

    I hope that’s helpful.
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