Proposal+5- Hashmeesh

Just like many major cities around the world Vancouver is battling a war against drugs. Vancouver has a large and growing heroin problem amongst its streets. To fight back and help the problem the city is giving away free heroin to addicts. They are giving addicts the best heroin on earth for free. The addicts are even given clean needles, supervision, and assistance.

The city of Vancouver says that they are helping the problem. They say that by doing this they are preventing the users from doing any crimes they normally would in order to obtain drugs. They are sustaining the users addiction but they are also helping the problem by keeping them off the streets and out of the hospitals.

Vancouver combats heroin by giving its addicts the best smack in the world

Background: This article gives an overview on the new program giving us information about how it works and the services they offer. We even get some insight on what the participants in the program are thinking.

How I intend to use it: This article will supply me information about the program and what they do. I will also get to look at some of the participants of the program. I will be able to see how the program affects them and if it actually works like they intend.

Prescription heroin offered in Vancouver outside of clinical trial for 1st time

Background: This article allows us to see how using the drug under medical care compares to using it in an alleyway. Doctors in this article say that some patients who partook in the trials have been able to improve their life and even reconnect with their families.

How I intend to use it: The information about how some patients were able to improve their life will be very useful in showing how these clinics can help some people. Patients might find it easier for them to better their life now that they don’t have to worry about shooting up in the streets. Being able to use in a clinic under medical supervision is a lot safer than the streets, it allows the addicts to move off of the streets as well.

The Only Place Where They’ll Inject You With Heroin for Free

Background: This article gives us information on how the trials will affect the spread and percentages of HIV and Hepititis C. Using in the streets puts addicts at great risk of catching disease.

How I intend to use itThe information on how using in a clinic that provides clean needles and medical supervision can affect the spread of HIV and Hepatitis C. When in the streets addicts will use and share dirty needles. Due to this they contract and spread many diseases. The clinics prevent the diseases from spreading.

Vancouver Experiments With Prescription Heroin

Background: This article tells us that the clinic isn’t 100 percent efficient in keeping participants safe. Users still have used and overdosed on street narcotics while in the program. Also the program gives out heroin and methadone. Methadone which is the traditional substitute for heroin has about 15 to 15 percent failure.

How I intend to use it: I will be able to use the information to show that the usual method of giving out methadone has more failures. At the clinic giving addicts heroin has a higher percentage of success. Most participants offered methadone stray from the program.

Vancouver: Giving junkies a fix to keep them off the street

Background: The article give me an insight on the controversy around the clinics. I get to see what people think of it and if it works. We see that there are many people who don’t support it and think it is just wrong. But we also see that they do reduce crime rates and are proven safer.

How I intend to use it: I intend to use the information about the controversy that surrounds the issue to show how it is perceived by the public. Seeing how this affects the public and the community is very crucial for success.

Addicts shoot up in safe haven in Canada 

Background: This article gives a little insight on how Insite was perceived amongst the Canadian government. We learn some information such as that the Prime minister was against the program. Other cities are also starting to take after Vancouver and try setting up clinics.

How I intend to use it: I intend to use this article to show that these programs have been set up in cities all over the world and have shown good results. Also that new cities are staring to try setting up their own clinics.

Prescription Heroin In Vancouver Will Be Handed To Addicts In A Game-Changing Experiment

Background: This article tells us that there is another drug in the streets that is being sold as heroin, that is causing many addicts to overdose.

How I intend to use it : I intend to use this article to show that the clinics are keeping addicts from running into this other drug in the streets. Now they have a less chance of overdosing since they are getting clean heroin at the clinics.

Vancouver’s Supervised Drug Injection Center: How Does It Work?

Background: In this article we learn a little bit about insist and what they do. The struggle gives us information such as how exactly the process of a user using Insite, the medical aliments that occur and information about the staff.

How I intend to use it: I intend to use this article to explain the experience that the users go through.

The arguments for and against Vancouver’s supervised injection site

Background: The article shows us some arguments for and against Insite. Insite has saved many lives, many patients have actually gone on to get clean and it benefits the community.

How I intend to use it: I intend to use this article to show that Insite saves lives by preventing overdose deaths. Some patients that are apart of Insite actually get referred to detox facilities. The program has also lowered the drug-related crime.

Addicts’ Safe Haven in Vancouver Helps Control HIV

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How I intend to use it:

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2 Responses to Proposal+5- Hashmeesh

  1. hashmeesh's avatar hashmeesh says:

    feedback was requested.
    Feedback provided. —DSH

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  2. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:

    Let me concentrate a bit on specific language first, Hashmeesh.

    —Do you see that “Just like many major cities around the world Vancouver is battling a war against drugs” means Vancouver is not a major city?

    —Do you see that “Vancouver has a large and growing heroin problem amongst its streets” means Vancouver has a lot of streets and some of them are heroin problems?

    —Do you see that “To fight back and help the problem” means the problem is in need of help and Vancouver is there to help it out?

    —Do you see that “the city is giving away free heroin to addicts” describes the heroin as BOTH a gift AND without cost?

    —Do you see that “the city is giving away free heroin to addicts. They are giving addicts the best heroin on earth for free” completely repeats itself and describes the heroin as a gift four times?

    —Do you see that “The city of Vancouver says that they are helping the problem” treats Vancouver first as singular (Vancouver says), and then immediately as plural (they are helping)? You need to choose one.

    —Do you see that a reasonable paraphrase for the entire second paragraph could be much shorter and clearer?:

    City officials say that without the supervised giveaway, addicts would rob and steal to support their habits, die in the streets, or overload the hospitals.

    Convey actual information, please
    This article gives an overview on the new program giving us information about how it works and the services they offer. We even get some insight on what the participants in the program are thinking.

    Based on your Background paragraph, Hashmeesh, what have I learned about the program, its methods, its services, or its participants’ thoughts?

    Let me make up some stuff
    Suppose instead you said something like:
    The article offers considerable evidence to support the claim that the program saves Vancouver more than a million dollars a year compared to providing emergency services to addicts. Not intended as a cure for addiction, this program merely makes it safer for those already addicted to stay healthy. Some even hold jobs, not possible when they had to commit crimes to fund their habits. Some do manage to get clean once their lives are stabilized, but the the others, the city is satisfied that they stay out of the hospitals and jails.

    That doesn’t just say THERE IS background information; it actually provides some, and gives us a good indication of the overall thrust of the argument of the original article.

    See the difference?
    Would it be too much work to revise this post for a regrade?
    I await your reply.

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