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There is a huge problem in Vancouver with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts. The problem is that there is a large crime rate due to the addicts. It is obvious that addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives. Daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because of the fact that they are using. By heroin users being addicted, they will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug. The types of crimes committed are those of breaking and entering as well as stealing. There are no limits to where they will go to retrieve this drug so that they can feed their addiction. The problem with this program is that it won’t help to ween these addicts off using heroin. It is only trying to save the city from rising crime rates that they’re up to. By providing the drug, these addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will prevent them from committing minor street crimes. This will also keep the heroin users out of the hospital. It is pointless that the hospitals have to deal with people that want to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles and find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and hard to cope without the drug. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. This will in turn fix the city but not the addiction that these people face.
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Vancouver faces a significant issue with heroin addicts resorting to crime to fuel bad habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program strives to combat this issue and help addicts better their lives. However, a massive crime rate persists due to the addicts’ desperate actions. It’s clear that addiction impacts daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships. Heroin dependence drives users to extreme lengths to obtain the drug, resulting in offenses such as burglary and theft. The endless search of the drug knows no bounds, creating challenges for law enforcement. Despite its intention to stop rising crime rates, the program falls short in addressing the main cause of addiction. While providing free heroin may temporarily slow down crime-rates and reduce hospital admissions due to unsafe drug use, it fails to address the addiction crisis. By prioritizing harm reduction over rehabilitation, the program overlooks the long-term well-being of individuals trapped in addiction cycles. While it may solve current concerns, it does little to break the cycle of addiction in the city.
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This is beautiful work, ILoveMyDog, but that won’t dissuade me from leaving too much criticism. Ready?
—Good as far as it goes, but . . . In three sentences, you’ve named an issue, then declared that the issue is being addressed, and then declared that the issue persists.
—Your primary verbs are “face” and “resort” and “strive” and “help” and “persist,” all of them improvements over verbs “to be.”
—It’s better than the original, to be sure, but could you combine and reduce those claims?
—Does this do it in one sentence? “In Vancouver, the ‘free heroin for addicts’ program has only partly reduced the wave of crimes committed by addicts desperate to score their drugs.”
—”Impact” is a completely neutral verb that doesn’t indicate whether the impact is positive or negative.
—When your sentence contains “burglary” and “theft,” you should consider using the verb forms. They’re pretty powerful. Yes, dependence drives users to crime, but the crimes themselves are more robust. Desperate addicts who can’t hold a job break into cars and homes and steal. You get the point.
—What sort of challenges? Does the street crime overwhelm the force? Does it stymie their efforts to keep the peace? Does the program ignore the cause of addiction while addressing only the symptoms?
—More or less the same questions as above.
—”harm reduction” is a lovely phrase. Good choice.
Yours is among the best I’ve read, LoveMyDog. Regrades are always available following significant improvements.
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